Aheila’s Drabble Day Challenge: Scenery

Another Drabble Day Challenge. 🙂 I think I earn bonus marks on this one. 😉 From Aheila’s Blog:


I’m very busy these days – yeah, I know, as opposed to what? – so I’m mixing today’s drabble with another thing I’ve got to write – otherwise known as the Absolute Write Water Cooler Blog Chain. More on that at noon today but this month’s prompt is to write a description: no dialog, no action, just the description. That’s what I’m reusing for you guys.

Remember how it works?

Read the prompt and find your angle.
Write a drabble (100 words story, give or take five words).
Post a direct link to your drabble in the comments (or, if you don’t have a blog, just go ahead and post your drabble in the comments).
In the post on your blog, make sure to link back to this post.
Today’s prompt is: Scenery!
And the extra challenge for points no one keeps track of: take a peculiar angle for your description!

Today, I feel that my description needs theme music. You can find the music here:

And finally – My Drabble:


The world is flashing by the windows of this vehicle. Bright colours, changing from dark to light, a brilliant white. I stare at it in wonder, seeing it for the first time – this beauty that surrounds me. Of the blue and red light reflected in a cascade of water, dripping down like mist from a waterfall. When it catches the water in just the right way – I see that light broken up into a rainbow of colours which swirls around me and those others present, anointing them with an unseen peace.
Beauty so precise, so unseen.
I close my eyes and allow myself to drift to the heavens, leaving my body behind in the wreckage of a car drenched in rain.

8 thoughts on “Aheila’s Drabble Day Challenge: Scenery

  1. tara tyler June 21, 2011 / 3:01 pm

    wow, that was beautiful and sad at the end…good job!

    • mish June 21, 2011 / 8:21 pm

      It makes one wonder , what does the conscious mind observe and latch on to , during the last few moments of life … is it minute details … as you’ve portrayed it … ? what about “your life flashes before your eyes” ?
      Good job Aly 🙂

      • Alyssa June 26, 2011 / 5:23 pm

        I try my best. 😉

  2. Jenn June 23, 2011 / 4:41 pm

    Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. And although it is sad, it is also very peaceful.

    • Alyssa June 26, 2011 / 5:24 pm

      I’d hope that the end would be peaceful eventually, lol. 😉 Thanks Jenn.

  3. Ryan June 24, 2011 / 9:31 pm

    Your vivid and beautiful description belies the eventual tragedy in a very provocative way. Nice job!

    • Alyssa June 26, 2011 / 5:25 pm

      Thanks Ryan, I’d hate to dissapoint.

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